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Double Entendre by ~bnc100:iconbnc100:



She gave him money to
repair the schoolhouse(.)
after it burned down.(, she gave him)
His lighter and his (money to) fire,(.)
they are never to be suspected.(.)
(Repair the school house,)
(after) He will get (it burned) away(.)
(Down) with everything.(,)
(his lighter and his fire.)
(They) Only (are) one women(.) who knew the
truth understands, but she will not tell
anyone for her love of his heart.
She promised (never to be suspected)
that (he will get away with everything only) once(.)
(One women who knew the truth understands, but) this was over,(.)
they would be happy.(, she will not tell anyone.)
But she did say(, for her love of his heart,)
that everything he was doing was wrong.
(She promised that once this was over,)
(they would be happy.)
(But she did say,)
(That everything he was doing was wrong.)

Everything you're doing is wrong.
©2009 ~bnc100
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Author's Comments

This poem can be read without the brackets or with the brackets and if you read just the brackets, it's the same poem as without the brackets. The capitals and punctuation outside of the brackets is for reading without the brackets and the punctuation inside the brackets is for reading with the brackets. Also, underlined letters mean a capital if reading with the brackets and italicized letters mean a lower case.

Inspired by the movie Secret Window.

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Really cool, really powerful poem. My only concern is the following line: "(They) Only (are) one women(.)"

if read with the brackets, it appears to become grammatically incorrect, unless you meant that the women is schizophrenic, and the man and the woman are only one woman. So quickly, tell me what you meant.

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I think I would be better if I changed it so it read, (They are) only one women(.)
I was addressing the belief that when doing something wrong, most people believe that everyone knows what they did, but in this case, they (the people that know) are only one woman because only one woman knows what he did.
Eh, it is kind of sticky there.

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